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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To wht extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years, Fast
food
 is booming in most of the countries. Whether people should restrict themselves to lead a healthy life or the government should incline tax on those
food
 items is a never-ending debate. Can anyone deny that one will not intake fast
food
 if taxes have been revised as they are addicted to the taste and lack of
time
? Certainly not. Doctors advise every individual not to consume fast
food
 as it damages
health
. Mostly, working professionals have
time
 constraints so, opt for outside
food
 as they rush up to their workplace which spoils their
health
. To illustrate, one of my friends staying in the hostel, had unsanitary foods daily and recently got stomach upset, Doctors are struggling to find the root cause.
In addition
, restaurants will not maintain a clean environment. Outer infrastructure will look decent but the kitchen? Definitely No. Yet, the projection seems to be quite neat.
On the other hand
, working professionals save their
time
 by skipping homemade
food
. Even if the government increase tax, officegoers will order outside
food
 as they have to rush to their commitments.
For instance
, an employee inside the campus will get an offer to a meal regularly to their access card, which benefits their neither
health
.
Apart from
this
, though home
food
 is hygienic people ignore it, for taste comparatively. A lot of biriyani lovers take it twice a week as they are addicted and no one can restrict them.
To conclude
,
instead
 of focusing on increasing taxes, why the government can take steps to improve the quality and hygienic
food
 ? Obviously yes.
Thus
, I strongly believe that restaurants should be aware of people's
health
while
 preparing
food
 as they are used to taste and few for lack of
time
.
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