In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
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task achievement
Ensure you address both sides of the discussion equally. While you have discussed both the advantages and disadvantages, the development of each could be more balanced.
task achievement
Avoid overgeneralizations without evidence, especially in serious topics (e.g., linking failure to suicide). Use hypothetical examples carefully to support your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Improve coherence by clearly organizing your essay into paragraphs, each with a single main idea. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea.
coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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