WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

There is no doubt that these days global
air
travel
has a significant increase compared with the previous decades. The question is what is the Impact of
this
increase? In
this
essay, I am going to discuss the reasons and benefits as well from the remarkable increase in the global
air
travel
sector. In terms of Advantages,
air
travel
not only reduces the
time
and effort required to
travel
from one place to another but
Also
,
it
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makes the
travel
experience more enjoyable. The main reason given to support
this
claim is that global
air
travel
has a positive impact on the economy, rather than the individuals, because of cargo and flight shipment the strategic goods like food, medicines, etc. To illustrate, those goods could be transferred from one place to another in a very limited
time
compared with the sea shipment. which saves
time
and money Plus it satisfies the customer's needs by making their products of
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available all the
time
and overcoming any shortage or out-of-stock
may
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occur.
Hence
selecting the
air
travel
option changes the equation dramatically
especially
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in Urgent situations.
For example
, if someone
need
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to do surgery abroad (outside his country)
previously
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this
process could be done within weeks or months if he uses traditional ways like the sea or road.
However
, by using
air
travel
it will take only a few hours to reach his destination. In conclusion, I think the development
in
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global
air
travel
is more beneficial and should be a priority for those peoples who
is
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concerned with
travel
as it saves
time
, and cost and it's safer compared with the traditional
travel
options.
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