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Some people belive that no one should be allowed to continue working after the age of 65. However, others say there shouldn't be a limitation on age and anyone should be allowed to work regardless of their age. Discuss both the views, give your own opinion and include relevant examples.

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Some communities think that
people
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 who are already 65 years old should stay at
home
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 and not have to work.
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, others believe that there is no restriction on
age
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 for working.
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 case has positive and negative aspects. population who are working after the
age
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 of 65 may harm themselves and others. The main aspect of the elderly becoming a worker after the
age
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 of 65 is the boring situation. They do not know how to stay at
home
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, even though their
health
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condition
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 is bad. Associations should take care of those elderly
people
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 when they are working. It might be their
health
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condition
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 to do something.
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, They usually get tremors or heart attacks when they are doing heavy
activities
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. They should avoid those
activities
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 and do only simple things. Companies should warn those
people
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 to take care of their
health
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.
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, companies should create regulations or procedures to restrict the elderly in working areas.
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, companies can generate a program to check their staff's
health
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condition
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 especially elderly
people
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.
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, the limitation on old
age
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 for doing something is good.
This
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 regulation can protect elderly
people
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 from harming their bodies and
health
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 conditions. Elderly
people
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 should stay at
home
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.
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, They must be supported by their families to do something at
home
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. Families can create several
activities
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 or programs that can attract the elderly to move their bodies and have fun together. If the elderly feel fun and happy, they can manage their
health
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condition
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. In conclusion, several aspects lead to the limitation of
age
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 for working. I think that the company should restrict and create regulations for the elderly to work.
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condition
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 will help the elderly to maintain their
activities
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 in the office.
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, they will be bored again, if they can work in the office after the
age
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 of 65.
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