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Technology causes more problems for modern society than it sloves. Do you agree or disagree ?

#technology #society #sloves
Individuals tend to believe that technological innovations have more disadvantages for the developed community than advantages. If you have a question, I am strongly opposed to
this
 concept. There are many arguments surrounding my opinion, which I will summarize in the next paragraph. To start with, the main argument I use to justify my position is to improve public health.
This
 means that many life-threatening diseases can now be easily treated. Using cutting-edge technology, it offers more precise robotic surgery
while
 treating patients at the surgery table. It not only saves human lives
,
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 but
also
 reduces the risk of complications from the countless operations.
For example
, in Japan, all minor brain surgeries have been carried out by automatic robotics equipment for many years, which has dramatically reduced the mortality rate of people.
In addition
, it plays an important role in business success. In order to describe
this
 more
in depth
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, it is observed that in many manufacturing
companies
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 there are today
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 savings devices installed to accelerate production capacity. These automated instruments will lead to the production of more products in a shorter period of time.
For example
, the food production companies in Balaji produced more goods using modernized machines, thereby increasing the
overall
 economic growth of the company.
However
, in fact, it has little impact, as it sometimes causes huge maintenance and replaces human work.
This
 can be reduced by appropriate services and by creating more opportunities for the authorities to work.
Overall
, despite the fact that technical services for current devices are not necessary, the advantages of technology are much more significant than the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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