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Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illness And diseases and not Enough on health education and prevention.Do agree or disagree?

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The states pay more on the cost of curing illnesses and diseases than on health literacy and the method of illness prevention. In recent conditions, the authority has had to focus on the best way to solve the problem of the ailment. There are two arguments, which are to improve education for health or to focus on the best treatment for sickness. In my view, I disagree with
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 statement because there are so many universities that get support from the regulator,
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 as scholarships for their medical faculty. It is one of the state's solutions to improve the number of doctors in the regional area. The best way to raise the awareness of society is through socialization. The governor has improved the medical personnel to give information about vaccines, stunting, and other things as
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 in many ranges. I believe it is better to avoid contracting an illness than to have to go around and look for a way to get rid of it. The states have given their best effort to improve the quality of their medical personnel through several scholarships and lectures around major fields, so they will spread their knowledge to their local space. The ministry should spend money on caring for the sick through the development of their hospital, but we have to remember the capabilities of the medical staff in that hospital. So, they must be provided a good education and scholarship for the future medical staff.
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, I strongly disagree with the statement because the government has supported the next generation of medical staff who are equipped with good knowledge of science and will be broadened around local areas to improve the knowledge of the local people about health education and ways to restrain illness.
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