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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

#students #attention #school
From the dawn of the education system, it is been a part of the debate that why
students
 could not pay
attention
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school. There are certain suggestions suggested by educationists which is been followed by the developed countries and they solved
this
 problem
till
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 some extent but the developing countries are still struggling with
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, there are certain reasons
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students
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school can not concentrate on lectures. First of all,
schools
 mostly teach theories to the
students
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 they cannot relate to
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reality.
For instance
,
subjects
 like applied sciences, which
students
 can not practically experience
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their
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 early
ages
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 like
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complicated fiction.
Students
 are forced to memorize it which is very boring.
Furthermore
, one the the
reason
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 behind the less
attention
 at school is the interest factor.
Schools
 tend to teach
students
 every subject but it is almost impossible that all the
students
 will have
interest
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 in every subject.
For example
, some
students
 like maths but do not like art and vice versa. So, those who are not interested in arts
subjects
, will not pay
attention
 to these
subjects
. In conclusion, forcing
students
 or overburdening
students
 might destroy their mental health
therefore
schools
 need to find some alternatives through which they teach
students
as well as
 earn their
attention
.
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 should start teaching applied sciences or theories through videos on multimedia so that
students
 can relate.
secondly
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, there should be options for
students
 to select among
subjects
.
this
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 way,
students
 will be able to learn the courses of their interest.
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  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
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  • health problems
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