Today our communications, medicine and transport systems all depend on computer technology. Our reliance on computer technology in these fields has created a dangerous situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Technology deeply penetrates many parts of modern
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everyday life. It is not a secret that even in critical industries Change noun form
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approach has a number of benefits I strongly believe that our dependence hides significant threats for all of us. Linking Words
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and the consequences of a sudden stop of services will help to prove that we could lose control.
First of all, there is no doubt that a modern clinic or a train station cannot function without computing power and network Correct subject-verb agreement
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systems
. The latest technologies in medicine which literally save lives every day have been relying on computers for decades. Use synonyms
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, a constantly increasing number of passengers and provided services on public transport create a strong bond for that industry with computer Linking Words
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Despite all the benefits which were mentioned in the previous paragraph, we have been in danger since the first computer virus attacked personal computers in the late eighties and a new word hacker appeared in a newspaper. With a wide spread of technology the door for a dark market, data corruption and even terror was opened for persons who want to use technology with no respect to social agreements and law. Use synonyms
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attacks cost billions of US dollars and in terrific cases even lives.
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To conclude
, I would like to highlight that it is an obvious fact that critical industries cannot function properly in the modern expanding world. Linking Words
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, our first priority is to protect critical Linking Words
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and industries from hackers' attacks and Use synonyms
systems
breakdowns because the price is incredibly high.Use synonyms
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Elaborate more on the possible consequences of over-reliance on computer technology in critical systems.
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