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The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The given table illustrates the number of
vehicles
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 registered in Australia between the
years
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 2010,2012 and 2014.
Overall
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, passenger
vehicles
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 remained the most registered vehicle all over the
years
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,
while
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 light trucks remained the lowest vehicle with registration,
however
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, over the
years
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 a slight increase has come for the light trucks.
Furthermore
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, motorcycles and commercial
vehicles
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 have increased more and more each year. In 2010 the most registered
vehicles
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 with a number of 11,000,000 million
registrations
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 were passenger
vehicles
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,which dominated all those
years
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 with a percentage of 18.2%,having 2014 over 13,000,000
registrations
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 in Australia.Motorcycles increased over the
years
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 with 30.7% having the most
registrations
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 in 2014 that were over 745,000,
while
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 commercial
vehicles
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 increased by 17.4% between those
years
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.
To sum up
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, all types of vehicle registration increased over those
years
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, even light trucks , which had 106,000
registrations
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 in 2010, and in 2014 it had 131,000
registrations
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 with a percentage of 23.5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, years, registrations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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