In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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and developing countries
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are living longer compared to the past,
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, certain individuals believe that
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the population
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of
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the elderly
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generation
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are not convenient for
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the government
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, another group of
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think that there are
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of chances for developing social life with
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the older
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about creating problems
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governments First of all,
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like
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longer
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developing medicine and
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the environment
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, I believe that living a long life is not good as other
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think Because elderly
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creates
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really many problems
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governments and
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. I mean, most part of old
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gender inequality, most of that type of
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are keen
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think that women are not
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as
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men
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type of mindset may affect on young
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too. Old
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can affect
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government
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of problems
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like everything in past
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better than now.
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, I do not refuse the fact that
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generation
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are
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need
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in
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elderly
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the elderly
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generation
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. Young
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, especially married
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couples
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do not know how to make
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family
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, old grandparents
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their advice from their experience. In my
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kind of
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are
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valuable for us Nothing is compared with
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the experiences
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of old
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, in our strict and dangerous world,
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the old
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generation
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violent children
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teenagers. In conclusion, I believe that there are two types of elderly
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, kind and irritated
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. Unfortunately, there are much
less kind
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fewer
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old
people
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that could make our society bright and in
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right way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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