In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
InDeveloped
and developing countries Correct your spelling
In developed
people
are living longer compared to the past, however
, certain individuals believe that population
of Correct article usage
the population
elderly
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the elderly
generation
are not convenient for government
. Add an article
the government
Although
, another group of Correct word choice
However
people
think that there are variety
of chances for developing social life with Add an article
a variety
old
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the older
generation
and I am partly agree
with Change the verb form
partly agree
statement
about creating problems Add an article
the statement
to
governments
First of all, Change preposition
for
people
like live
longer Fix the infinitive
to live
due to
developing medicine and environment
. Correct article usage
the environment
However
, I believe that living a long life is not good as other individual
think Because elderly Change the wording
individuals
people
creates
really many problems Change the verb form
create
to
governments and Change preposition
for
environment
. I mean, most part of old Correct article usage
the environment
people
are use
to Change the verb form
are used
are using
think
in different Change the verb form
thinking
way
. Fix the agreement mistake
ways
For instance
gender inequality, most of that type of people
are keen into
think that women are not Change preposition
to
possible
as Rephrase
as possible
mens
I think Correct your spelling
men
this
type of mindset may affect on young generation
too. Old people
can affect to
the Change preposition
apply
goverment
with Correct your spelling
government
amount
of problemsAdd an article
the amount
,
like everything in past Remove the comma
apply
were
better than now.
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was
However
, I do not refuse the fact that young
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the young
generation
are
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is
need
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needed
in
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by
elderly
Correct article usage
the elderly
generation
. Young people
, especially married couple
do not know how to make Fix the agreement mistake
couples
good
family Correct article usage
a good
therefore
, old grandparents are give
their advice from their experience. In my Change the verb form
give
opinion
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,opinion
this
kind of advices
Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
are
valuable for us Nothing is compared with Correct subject-verb agreement
is
experiences
of old Correct article usage
the experiences
people
Moreover
, in our strict and dangerous world, old
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the old
generation
can help for
violent children Change preposition
apply
especially
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,especially
for
teenagers.
In conclusion, I believe that there are two types of elderly Change preposition
apply
generation
, kind and irritated people
. Unfortunately, there are much less kind
old Correct word choice
fewer
people
that could make our society bright and in a
right way.Correct article usage
the
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