In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

InDeveloped
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In developed
and developing countries
people
are living longer compared to the past,
however
, certain individuals believe that
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of
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the elderly
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generation
are not convenient for
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the government
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.
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, another group of
people
think that there are
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a variety
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of chances for developing social life with
old
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the older
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generation
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the statement
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about creating problems
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governments First of all,
people
like
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to live
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longer
due to
developing medicine and
environment
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the environment
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.
However
, I believe that living a long life is not good as other
individual
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individuals
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think Because elderly
people
creates
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really many problems
to
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for
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governments and
environment
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the environment
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. I mean, most part of old
people
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to
think
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in different
way
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.
For instance
gender inequality, most of that type of
people
are keen
into
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think that women are not
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as possible
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as
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men
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I think
this
type of mindset may affect on young
generation
too. Old
people
can affect
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the
goverment
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government
with
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of problems
,
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like everything in past
were
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better than now.
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, I do not refuse the fact that
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the young
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generation
are
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need
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needed
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in
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by
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elderly
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the elderly
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generation
. Young
people
, especially married
couple
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couples
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do not know how to make
good
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family
therefore
, old grandparents
are give
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their advice from their experience. In my
opinion
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this
kind of
advices
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advice
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are
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valuable for us Nothing is compared with
experiences
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the experiences
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of old
people
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, in our strict and dangerous world,
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the old
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generation
can help
for
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violent children
especially
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for
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teenagers. In conclusion, I believe that there are two types of elderly
generation
, kind and irritated
people
. Unfortunately, there are much
less kind
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fewer
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old
people
that could make our society bright and in
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right way.
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  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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