Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself.

Dear Mr. Stars, My name is Marina Hiss and

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is my first year at Hallberry College. As History of Art is a mandatory class to attend I have made a decision to take it in my initial year. I spent my childhood in Texas and graduated from middle school named after John Lenon in 2015. Later that year I entered an art school in Barcelona and spent 2 years studying and practising architecture of the Middle-Earth. My lead professor had been honoured

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medal for his merits and is quite popular within Europe

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his innovative approaches. In 2022 I was able to fulfill my solo project in Italy and as the result was highly appreciated I was lucky to be admitted to your institution. Parallel to my studies I run my own business as we do the renovation works for local authorities. I would like to inform you that these classes are vital for my future career,

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, I will do my best to satisfy the requirements in order to pass with maximum grades. I hope I have delivered

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information. Faithfully Yours, Marina

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