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Children today have more responsibilities than the past. Some people think it has positive effects than negative ones while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the past
children
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 used to have more
responsibilities
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 in comparison with the current situations. Some have the idea that it has more benefits than what is occurring nowadays. From my point of view, the given
responsibilities
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 should be limited to what a child can handle. Having more
responsibilities
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 can prepare
children
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 for
life
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.
Due to
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 the numerous duties that kids may be in charge of,
life
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 skills are encouraged and developed in a more effective way. Being influenced by the experience gained, the
children
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 are wiser to take appropriate measures to solve any issue imposed . In Japan, the education system promotes being responsible by encouraging the students to clean their school as part of their daily routines.
Children
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 who are used to taking more
responsibilities
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 can act more accurately in
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.
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, the reduction in the number of duties may provide more time for
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 to play which is fundamental to their mental health. We need to consider more time to play for
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, if we want to have healthier
children
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. Having numerous duties is harmful to their mental health as their capacity to handle and deal with many tasks is limited. In Africa, there are many kids deprived of childhood as they have to work like grown-up adults. Play is vital for every child as it brings satisfaction and happiness. In conclusion,
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 some have the notion that preparing
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 for
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 by giving them different
responsibilities
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 is crucial, I think the need to play should considered as the first priority for any child.
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