Reading comics only rot the children’s mind than to provide any good education . how far do you agree /disagree with this?

On
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of the leisure things youngsters love to do nowadays is
reading
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comics
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online or the material itself. It has been argued that it has no benefits to the
children
and does not contribute to their studies. I agree with the above notion and
this
essay will discuss the reasons.
To begin
with, reading should be a habit a child should practice at
the
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early age. Reading should be fun and educational. Every
children
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should
be encourage
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to read
boooks
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books
or articles
not
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comics
. The
books
aid the reader to obtain more knowledge,explore different ideas and
helps
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to
widened
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their vocabulary as well.
Hence
,
due to
the technological advances that we have, many young ones
were
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already exposed to
comics
online. There were comic
books
before but the new era offers everything online including reading
comics
too.
Thus
,
this
gives
an
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easy access to
children
to
comics
instead
of buying comic
books
.
Comics
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their one way to cope
up
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with their peers, depending on what is on the market and
this
is how they relieve stress.
Nevertheless
, we cannot ignore the fact that
this
hinders the study
habit
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habits
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of a student.
For instance
, after school a child should be reviewing his or her lesson but what
happen
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is,
most
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that most
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of them engage themselves in their own gadgets and watch videos or read
comics
online. So,
this
habit can really
affects
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their school performance.
Furthermore
,buying comic
books
cause
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causes
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a lot of
fortunes
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especially
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to
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students
whom
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the
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main source of income is their allowances.
This
sets
as
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a bad example for students at
the
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young age to spend their money on these things which are not essential. They should learn how to manage their finances to avoid future
crisis
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.
For example
, if a student was given an
alowance
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allowance
to buy a meal, he or she would rather not eat as long as he can buy the latest update on her or his favorite comic book.
In addition
, doing
this
can
also
affects
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their health by not eating right.
To sum up
,
i
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fully agree that comic
books
do no good to
children
but only for fun,
self gratification
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and a waste of money.
Comics
obsession can
also
affects
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affect
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their studies and health.They should focus more on reading good
books
and materials that will help them
on
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their studies and
leads
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lead
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them to become
a well-rounded individuals
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well-rounded individuals
a well-rounded individual
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.
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