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Friendships that take place online are not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era,
individuals
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friends
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by
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with
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 the help of social
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, but
there
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friendships
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 are not
so
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as
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 true as
like
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the
friends
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 who meet with each other. I completely agree with the statement because
people
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 do not know anything about the
life
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lives
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 of other persons, and
also
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people
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 can not express their emotions clearly. On the one hand, online
friendships
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 are not so good as
individuals
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 do not know about each other. To make it more precise, on various social media applications, many
people
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 give their fake information, so
others
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 have no idea whether
this
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 information is relevant or not.
Apart from
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this
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, sometimes some
people
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 become
friends
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others
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 to trap them in their fraud,
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that
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which
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 is why online
friendships
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 are not meaningful.
For example
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,
according to
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 a survey, many hackers by the use of different
sites
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friends
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,
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 and
then
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 hack their social media accounts to blackmail them for money.
On the other hand
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, in the online
modes
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people
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 can not see the other
persons
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person's
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emotion
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emotions
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 clearly. To elaborate
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it
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, most
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of
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the
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people
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others'
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others
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others'
other's
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 feelings only for their entertainment, and some
individuals
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lie
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lies
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 to gain the sympathy of
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other
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another
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other
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persons
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people
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.
In addition
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,
people
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personality
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personalities
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 totally
different
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differently
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 to the original on
the
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social
sites
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. To exemplify,
according to
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of
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 "The Hindustan Times", most
of
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the
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online
friendships
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 are broken nowadays because of the fake feelings that
people
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 show towards each other. In
conclusions
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conclusion
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, in my opinion, I strongly agree
with
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that
the
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apply
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online
friendships
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 are not so meaningful because
people
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 do not know exactly about each other , and most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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individuals
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 cannot understand
the
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their
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 feelings towards
the
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apply
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others
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 as so
much
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many
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 fake illustrations are on
the
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apply
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online
sites
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-verbal communication cues
  • depth of understanding
  • spontaneous
  • genuine moments
  • shared interests
  • sense of physical presence
  • evolve
  • constant connectivity
  • nurture friendships
  • busy schedules
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