The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012.

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of Manchester City between 2003 and 2012. It is clear from

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graph that, Robbery shows a remained level over the years.

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between 2003 and 2004 accounted for the top of

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graph about 3700,

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number decreased sharply until

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almost 1000 in 2008 and increased in 2009 to just 1500 and remained steady until the end of the period.

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, car theft climbed from 2009 to 2012 from around 2400 to around 2700,

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is the highest rate, after a long time of steady figures. In terms of robbery crimes, it

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showed levelled number between 500 to under 1000,

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, the highest rate was in 2005 and the lowest was in 2008.

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