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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
libraries
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 are no longer useful for the majority of
people
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 because of the ease and convenience of the
Internet
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, so
people
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 can search for all the information on their
devices
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 anywhere and anytime,
others
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and I believe that
libraries
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 still play an important role in helping some
people
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 who do not have
access
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 to the device and
internet
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 at home. On the one hand, nowadays
people
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 believe that public
libraries
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 are not important anymore because of the convenience of the
Internet
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. By
this
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 I mean the vast majority of
people
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 have their own
access
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 to
devices
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 like computers or smart gadgets in their own homes so they do not have to go to the
libraries
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 to find information on
books
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 and research anymore.
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according to
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 the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it is revealed that 95% of students who study in the geological department have their own laptops with the
Internet
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, so they can search the information online when they have to deal with their reports or assignments. It is evident that the
Internet
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 helps them with a number of tasks they are assigned by their professors and they can achieve the goal. Public
libraries
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 are not important anymore and should not exist in any city to be able to save costs and use the funds to develop other facilities.
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, others including myself, disagree with those who think that
libraries
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 should be eliminated from the cities because it is still important and useful to
people
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 who do not have
access
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 to wifi and
devices
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 at home. By
this
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 I mean
people
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 who do not have
access
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 to the
Internet
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 will have a chance to use the computers in the
libraries
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also
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people
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 who like reading physical
books
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 or newspapers can go to borrow
books
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 and magazines including CDs and learning packages from their local
libraries
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. To illustrate
this
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, the research reported by the Bangkok Librariy team, it is revealed that 80% of their members are elderly and children who go to the library as they need help dealing with modern technology and learning how to use computers and the
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. If we do not have public
libraries
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 for them, they will not have any help with their problem. In conclusion, some
people
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 believe that public
libraries
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 are no longer important for
people
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 because most
people
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 have
devices
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 and they can read
books
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 from an online source ,
while
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 others and I think that
libraries
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 are still useful to
people
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 who have no
access
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 to the
Internet
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 at home or some book lovers and children who like to read with physical
books
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.
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