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Some people say that it is possivle to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 have
this
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 view that the
clothes
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 which they wear could highly show their
culture
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 and
character
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.
Although
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someone
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's
clothes
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 can say a lot, from my point of view it is not the best way to judge a book by its cover. In
this
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 essay, I will talk about the relationship between
clothes
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 with
people
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's
culture
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 and
character
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 and explain it to some extent.
To begin
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 with, the majority of countries have their own
culture
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 and
this
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 has affected positively and negatively the way
people
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 wear
clothes
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. Their
culture
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 has rather been one of the factors to buy a piece of
clothes
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. Take India as an example, they usually have their own tradition of wearing a piece of
clothes
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 on their head. Resulting in wearing those in their heads whenever they go.
Consequently
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, when we interact with
someone
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 who wears it, we can guess that they could be Indian.
Furthermore
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, different characters and personalities could have a significant effect on buying
clothes
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, their colour, size, and other qualities.
For instance
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,
someone
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 who is disciplined and self-confident often keeps their shoes tidy and bright. It could be evident that they are highly considered self-confident.
In addition
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,
someone
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 who is rich
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 usually wears cheap and low-quality
clothes
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.
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, in most of the interviews with employers, it is recommended to wear suitable, neat to show our strong personality.
However
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, it is just a possibility to judge
people
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's
character
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 and their beliefs or
culture
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 by their
clothes
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. It could be considered as a personal interpretation which could be wrong about
people
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 at times.
Due to
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 financial difficulties that a lot of
people
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 have been facing recently, some of those might have an inadequate amount of money to wear something to express themselves by themselves,
whereas
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 may have the best manner and attitude, or be truly hard-working . What's more, the rich frequently wear medium-quality and cheap to some extent
clothes
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 for some reasons.
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, they would not like to pretend and show off about their lifestyle.
Secondly
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, they might feel quite well and comfortable to wear reasonable
clothes
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.
Therefore
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, we can not sometimes look at
people
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's
clothes
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 and interpret that they are not rich.
To sum up
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,
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 I partly believe that it could be likelihood to judge
someone
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's
culture
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 or personality by their
clothes
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, sometimes it could be impossible to talk about
people
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's
character
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 by the way they wear.
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task response
Ensure that your essay fully addresses the question prompt. Clarify your position on whether clothes can accurately reflect culture and character, and provide a clear thesis statement.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a more coherent manner. Use transition words to link your ideas and develop a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your essay effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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