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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has become a common practice amongst people to
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 electronic
books
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 than hard copies.
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 obviously has some benefits and
downside
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 to it. I will say it is more advantageous to
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 soft copy
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 of paper
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.
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 easily accessible. People can get
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 on electronic data anywhere and at
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. It creates some flexibility and individuals can read whilst on a transport or even at a party. It depends on the person.
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,
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 are relatively cheap. It
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 nothing or very little to own an electronic book compared to a hard copy version.
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 has lessened the burden parents had to go through to meet the educational needs of their wards.
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, the
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 of soft copies reduces the incidences of back pain. I recall most of
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 had back pain from having to carry lots of
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 in the 1990s to school.
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 health problem is a thing of the past as the modern student only carries a
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 electronic gadget to school and is able to perform as required by the school.
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 it seems the
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 of
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books
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 many gains, they are not without drawbacks. A leading disadvantage is
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 and reduced vision from prolonged screen time. There have been reports of persons developing headaches and blurred sight from constant reading using
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mobile devices or laptops. Experts say
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 is true and
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we
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take
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 frequent breaks during studies on these devices to avoid
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 problem.
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, the thought of accessing
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 as and when needed has minimised the ability of today's
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students
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 to retain
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 as there's a notion of why
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 need to commit some vital
information
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 to memory when it can be obtained just a click away. The downside to
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 is poor network making it difficult to retrieve vital
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 in a timely fashion.
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, there are
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 notifications on
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 electronic gadgets that can distract our studies. A person may end up learning nothing even though that was the original intent
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 these distractions that can occur with the
use
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 of those devices.
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, it is evident that in as much as the
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books
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 significant benefits, it is not without drawbacks but worth remembering the advantages
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 the disadvantages.
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