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Some people believe that richer countries should give poorer countries more financial assistance. Discuss the reasons why rich nations should provide those and why they shouldn't. give your opinion.

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Helping others is a part of human nature. A number of people think that developed
countries
 should provide aid to developing nations,
while
 others think that they can help themselves. I personally think that financial help from first-world
countries
 can be beneficial in many different ways.
To begin
 with, It can help when it comes to the infrastructure of the country. With the help of
this
 money, they can build Hospitals, Colleges, and roads which can help them to improve the quality of life.
Moreover
, Having well-built highways and ports can boost the economy of any country
thus
, helping them to become self-sufficient.
For example
,
according to
 BBC News
countries
 like Egypt, Syria, and Yemen were able to come out of the poverty index and it only happened with the help provided by US and Germany. On the opposite side, there are many reasons, why some
countries
 do not like to help when it comes to under-developed
countries
 and corruption is one of them. Moving
further
, Politicians in these nations are the most corrupt and they save all the money in their bank accounts,
whereas
 the masses suffer from it as they get nothing out of it.
For instance
, a report submitted by the Daily Post showed that around seven out of ten politicians are from poorer
countries
 who use financial assistance for their own benefit.
To conclude
, I think that by helping the needy, we can build a better world, where everybody lives the life they want to live.
However
, developed
countries
 should
also
 look forward to their own citizens and help them first before helping anybody else.
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