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Nowadays, more individuals are choosing healthier lifestyles given the fact of not consuming animal products, such as, meat or fish. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Recently,
people
 in society now consume more Internet than the previous generations and it leads them to choose
vegan
 or vegetarian diets rather than consuming living beings' meat, considering several things. For sure, all these choices have both merits and downsides.
Firstly
, I want to discuss the advantages
vegan
 diets could give. My friends have
vegan
 diet for two years and their skins will never regret the choice they have ever made. By consuming greens every day, fibres needed for daily intake are fully covered and the toxins that make skin full of acne are taken out coincides with our time in the bathroom. Luckily, we don't need to store the toxicity and bad bacteria in our bodies for days because it's already released daily. So, our bodies stay healthy for a longer time and diseases will most unlikely come over. Thanks to all vegetative foods.
However
,
people
 should be really careful and examine their health before deciding whether to take a
vegan
 diet or not.
Additionally
, only eating vegetable products is not the best option for
people
, especially, a person who has anaemia. Fruits that contain
vitamin
B
 may not be that many,
for example
, beetroot.
Nevertheless
, even though beetroot offers
Vitamin
B
, it's still not enough for the anaemic survivor.
Besides
, they need to consume a bigger amount of
vitamin
B
 complex that can only be found in beef. In conclusion, the advantages of not consuming animal products outweigh the disadvantages. But on a serious note,
people
 who choose a
vegan
 diet at least should consult their doctor, to make sure if they have
vitamin
B
 deficiency or not. Unless they want to get more serious health problems
instead
 of healthier lifestyles.
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