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10.Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

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It is true there are more and more international
companies
 in under-developed countries. In
this
 essay, I will outline the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 trend. Foremost among these benefits is the proliferation of job opportunities. When
the
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global
companies
 set up their establishments and brands in developing countries, they usually need to employ large amounts of employees to support their local business, in turn enabling local people to attain
a well-paying jobs
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 and gain skills and knowledge through these positions. What
this
 does is make it potentially absolutely beneficial.
For example
,
Xi’an
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in Xi’an
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, which is a famous heavy industry city in China, globally renowned
companies
such
 as
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Siemens
 and Samsung have built their factories in
this
 region, providing thousands of job positions for citizens, and
this
 ultimately leads to a more affluent life
to
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 locals.
However
, the drawbacks
this
 trend has caused are obvious and chief among these is
destruction
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 of the environment. If these corporations build up their own factories, they need to explore the new space and get permission from the government to discharge
emission
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 from their manufacture, and
this
 ultimately results in
an
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 significant increase in pollution in
this
 area and is extremely detrimental.
The
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 inner region
in
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 China,
for instance
, mining activity has depleted the local environment. As
such
, mountains and highlands are losing
in
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 a dramatic pace, which is why
this
 development invariably comes at the cost of irreparable
damaged
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 to the environment. In conclusion, there are clear advantages of
the
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multinational
companies
are
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 becoming increasingly common in developing countries,
however
, the disadvantages are
also
 obvious.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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