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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the future, many
transportations
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transportation
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 will be
operate
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 without
driver
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drivers
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,
therefore
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only passengers
who
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will be in the vehicle. I personally believe that a vehicle with
driver
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the driver
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 has more
benefit
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benefits
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 because of the safety for us to use the transportation. On the positive
sides
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,
this
 technology will help us to go wherever we want without feeling tired because we don’t have to drive.
Moreover
,
people
 who
has
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 high mobility
doesn’t
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 need to hire a
driver
 and it can help reduce the
cost
. It can
also
 apply for a company to decrease their transportation
cost
 and it can make a good impact
to
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 their expenses.
For example
, if the operation activity from a company needs to deliver their goods to the customer, it will save more money because it can reduce the
cost
 of
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 process.
For
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 the negative
sides
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,
the
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safety is still questioned by some
people
. We
not
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 sure about the reliability and how the technology
handle
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handles
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 the problem when it
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 by
people
.
Furthermore
,
eventhough
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even though
 it can reduce
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the cost
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cost
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costs
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for
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 our daily
activity
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, it
also
 can make a lot of
driver
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 lose their job and cause
an
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increase
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unemployment
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. As we know, there are so many
people
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 in developing
country
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countries
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 who
has occupation
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have been employed
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 as a
driver
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as a result
of
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of
this
 growing sector. In conclusion,
the
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transportation with driverless has more disadvantages due
some
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 perspectives and for some
people
 it
less
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is less
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 secure. In my opinion, safety is the most important thing for
people
 to use a vehicle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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