The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.
The given diagram illustrates the life span (
cycle
) of the honey bees.
overall
, In
this
picture of the honey bee, we can see from the birth to end process.
This
process contains numerous stages, those stages are explained briefly in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
with the life
cycle
, the first
stage
is laying 1 or 2 eggs by the female honey bees , in a short period of every 3 days. after a couple of days nymph hatches from the eggs , within a five-daydays gap the nymph is little grown and it just flies around the nest where all the other bees are .
In addition
, the little grown nymph goes to the
stage
of moult
and
Correct word choice
apply
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it
Correct pronoun usage
which
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is
also
a
Correct article usage
the
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4th
stage
in the life
cycle
. followed by that , within 9 days it reaches the
stage
of young adult and it
also
emerges by others . the next
stage
is the maturity
stage
, in which it lays eggs.
likewise
Rephrase
Similarly
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the
cycle
continuous
Add a missing verb
is continuous
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.
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