The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.
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The given diagram illustrates the life span (
cycle
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) of the honey bees.
overall
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, In
this
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picture of the honey bee, we can see from the birth to end process.
This
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process contains numerous stages, those stages are explained briefly in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
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with the life
cycle
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, the first
stage
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is laying 1 or 2 eggs by the female honey bees , in a short period of every 3 days. after a couple of days nymph hatches from the eggs , within a five-daydays gap the nymph is little grown and it just flies around the nest where all the other bees are .
In addition
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, the little grown nymph goes to the
stage
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of moult
and
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apply
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it
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which
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is
also
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a
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the
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4th
stage
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in the life
cycle
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. followed by that , within 9 days it reaches the
stage
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of young adult and it
also
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emerges by others . the next
stage
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is the maturity
stage
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, in which it lays eggs.
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likewise
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Similarly
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the
cycle
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continuous
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is continuous
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.
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