The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.
The given diagram illustrates the life span (
cycle
) of the honey bees.
overall
, In this
picture of the honey bee, we can see from the birth to end process. This
process contains numerous stages, those stages are explained briefly in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
with the life cycle
, the first stage
is laying 1 or 2 eggs by the female honey bees , in a short period of every 3 days. after a couple of days nymph hatches from the eggs , within a five-daydays gap the nymph is little grown and it just flies around the nest where all the other bees are .
In addition
, the little grown nymph goes to the stage
of moult and
Correct word choice
apply
it
is Correct pronoun usage
which
also
a
4th Correct article usage
the
stage
in the life cycle
. followed by that , within 9 days it reaches the stage
of young adult and it also
emerges by others . the next stage
is the maturity stage
, in which it lays eggs. likewise
the Rephrase
Similarly
cycle
continuous
.Add a missing verb
is continuous
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