The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007
The graph depicts how many foreigners visit different regions
such
as the coast, the mountains and the
lakes
from the year 1987 to 2007 in
a
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European countries.
Overall
, the trend of visiting the coastal areas has increased tremendously over the period of time by surpassing the number of people going to the
lakes
. it can
also
be seen that amount of people visiting mountains rises. From 1987 to 1992 there was a slight decrease in the number of guests in the coastal area from 40000 to around 30000 and
then
this
trend rose dramatically and reached its peak of more than 70k in the year 2007.
While
the
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lakes
visitors witness the moderate rose from 10
thousand
to 40
thousand
only afterwards which increases in a serious way to reach the highest level of approximately 75
thousand
,
then
drops to 50000 in the year 2007. On the
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contary
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contrary
we can see a stable growth in the number of people travelling to the
lakes
as in the beginning it was about 20000 and
at the end
of the period is more than 30
thousand
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lakes, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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