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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge etc. why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

Education
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 plays an important role in everyone's life. Some people prefer going for higher
education
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 as it helps people to think critically about their
future
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 careers and gather knowledge in different interesting fields.
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 my opinion, Our community should go for higher
education
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 because going to colleges and
universities
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boost
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boosts
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youngster's
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youngsters'
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 confidence and
give
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gives
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 them plenty of opportunities to work on their skill
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 higher knowledge in their chosen field. As mentioned before, Higher
education
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 is becoming as important as having food on a daily life basis. In today's world, it is getting quite important to attend colleges and
universities
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 to have a balanced lifestyle.
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, All big brand companies and organizations give priority to staff with higher
education
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 and more experience.
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, it is only possible to get enough training and gain experience if people go for bachelor's or master's degrees in colleges and
universities
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.
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, higher
education
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 helps youngsters to make their minds sharp and think critically about the career they are going to pursue in
future
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.
While
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 studying higher degrees and courses, students can choose a specific field
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 their own choice which is necessary to achieve desired goals in one's mind.
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, many
universities
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 provide certain courses with training and placements that help students get good jobs in
future
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 as well. In conclusion, our young generation is the
future
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 of our country. So, we should help them at our best. Going for higher
education
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 is always a good choice as it only increases knowledge, gives more chances to students to learn something different and has high standards in life.

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task response
The essay provides a comprehensive discussion on the reasons why people attend colleges or universities. The points are well-explained with relevant examples and arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction lacks a clear thesis statement and the conclusion could be strengthened by summarizing the main points.
task response
The essay effectively explains the benefits of higher education and the importance of critical thinking for future careers.
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The examples provided support the main points well and enhance the argument for attending colleges or universities.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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