Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a “gap year”; before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to a broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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From a very young age, my parents challenged me with complex courses and different clubs. At the age of four, I learned the English language, which was the third language after Kazakh and Russian. At the age of six, I played the piano and started my career in sports-ballroom dances; these hobbies taught me to be disciplined and ambitious
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because there are no limitations to personal growth. As a teenager, I discussed with my parents about our own impact on the world and society,
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, the desire to make a positive influence led me to another challenge. My parents’ business specializes in wooden toys, so I worked as a volunteer at my parents’ shop to analyze the market, apply some strategies to increase the number of customers and
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recognize some trends in wooden toys at present.
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experience and my parents’ involvement gave me the most valuable opportunity to try myself in business and
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field as my future occupation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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