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The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002.

The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002.
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 report derives the table, which illustrates the percentage of spending money on different goods in 5 countries in 2002. A good starting point would be to say that, spending on food, drinks and tobacco led the pack
every
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 country shown, whilst the amount of money
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spent on leisure and education was the least. The first result worth pointing out is that
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 Turkey had the lion’s share with 32.14% for spending money on food, drinks and tobacco
while
 Sweden had the least with a rate of 15.77%. Ireland followed Turkey’s placement with a percentage of which is less by approximately 3% than Turkey’s.
On the other hand
, it can be clearly seen that
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 of Italy liked clothing and footwear more than the others. The percentages of Spain, Ireland and Turkey’s consumings
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 clothing and footwear were nearly
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are around 6.50%.
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, Turkish people were more likely to
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 that they liked education,
due to
 their percentage which is 4.35%, whilst Spain experienced the bottom placement with 1.98% in the same area. Swede individuals experienced the second placement with a ratio of 3.22% on the competition of education.
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