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Television dominates the free time for too many people It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others Do you agree or disagree Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Television is one of the most important social topics about how it affects
people
's lifestyles. Nowadays, folk have mixed views about whether it is applicable equipment or whether it causes persons to be isolated from society and unmotivated. In
this
 particular essay, I will explore my opinion with some reasons and examples, in terms of the disadvantages of TV usage and how it damages social activities.
To begin
 with, as we are living in the industrial age digital tools play significant roles in our life.
Although
 they are useful, they have their own damage. Particularly, it leads to separating children from their parents. In
this
 order, the relationship between members of the nuclear family becomes disturbed. An instance,
according to
 the latest articles, after the invention of social media, family meeting has been reduced and
people
 do not talk directly with each other. On the other side, watching the screen has an awful influence on the health of folk. In
this
 order, individuals, who follow the digital pixels become pretty lazy. In
this
 case, they become overweight and they tend to eat junk food
instead
 of cooking. Based on recent scientific conferences, using media causes
people
 to be depressed,
for example
. Eventually, watching television has a major effect on both mental and physical health. And I agree definitely that
this
 technology is really harmful special for the young. To meet
this
 challenge, I think the government should manage
this
 problem by inviting
people
 to social activities and sports. Television dominates the free time for too many
people
 It can make
people
 lazy and prevent them from socializing with others Do you agree or disagree Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dominates
  • lazy
  • prevents
  • socializing
  • entertainment
  • sedentary
  • lifestyle
  • limits
  • interaction
  • educational
  • source of information
  • tool
  • balanced approach
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
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