The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumotion.

The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumotion.
The chart illustrates the meat and poultry
consumption
in 4 popular meat species (
beef
,
pork
,
broliers
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broilers
broiler
and turkey), between 1955 to 2012.
Overall
, the
consumption
of
beef
,
pork
and
tyrkey
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turkey
undergoes some fluctuations, but was almost similar in the first and the
last
year.
However
, the broilers, which were consumed from 1960 to 2012, increased significantly. the
consumption
of
beef
and
pork
was around 60 and 50
pounds
in 1955.
The
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experienced some fluctuation during 6 decades and stayed almost
in
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at
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60
pounds
in 2007. After that, The amount of
beef
and broilers dramatically decreased to just below 60
pound
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pounds
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,
while
after
this
period they had
a
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an
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opposite trend until the
last
year to
stayed
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near 50
pound
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pounds
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for both of them. In the case of turkey , the first report was for 1960 with less than 10
pounds
. the
consumption
of turkey did not change significantly in the given period and always stayed around 10
pounds
,
while
the amount of
pork
which was consumed experienced some fluctuation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, beef, pork, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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