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These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children’s behavior. Do you agree or disagree?

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In contemporary society, there is no question that being invariably exposed to violent scenarios brings detrimental consequences to the communities.
While
 some guardians believe that it is important to allow
children
 to watch whatever preferred
materials
, others argue that exposure to deviant
materials
 jeopardizes
children
's characteristics. I completely agree that watching violent mediums impinges on youngsters negatively and parents should divert their attention towards beneficial
materials
.
Firstly
, the presence of violence, by and ,large has a serious impact on the community and serves as a profound dilemma for
children
 in particular.
In other words
,
children
 at an early stage are pliable creatures, their brains are still pure, and they observe the surrounding environment and imitate everything.
therefore
, exhibiting them to violent
materials
, their traits will be influenced by these and may instil in their attributes.
For example
,
while
children
 watch animation and cartoon movies, they always try to imitate the ideal characters
such
 as Superman and even they are fascinated by wearing their costumes.
that is
 why it is essential to fixate the attention on beneficial and positive visualizations, as
this
 plays a vital role in raising offspring personality.
Moreover
, apart from
children
's effects, there is a public consensus that recently societies have been suffering from an increasing number of heinous actions in the public avenues. in other terms, watching
such
 violent activities, results in the proliferation of incidents in public places.
While
 a wide range of age categories
as well as
children
 afflicted by behaviour disorders, owing to family recklessness and being in an invasive environment.
For instance
, media and other news highlighted some accidents at schools and clubs when hostile
children
 beat, bullied and prone other colleagues to deviant actions.
that is
 why
children
 should be banned from watching
such
 negative behaviours.
To conclude
, it is absurd to let
children
 be exposed to any disadvantages, parents have to rear their offspring properly. it is important to deter
such
 violent movies and target
children
 toward beneficial
materials
. I am strongly against violence in all media.
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