Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or Playing Computer games for children. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In these present days, some kind of people think that reading stories from

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books

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books

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are

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better than watching TV and Playing PC games for

infent

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entertainment

. Personally, I support the idea that

children

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should read

books

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more than watching programs. In fact, more than half

percentage

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of the world

into

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about

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apply

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PC or modern

smart phones

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instead

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books

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According to games

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as well as

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programs has many benefits for

children

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for instance

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they

are

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can learn more about tools

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that are needed

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their life.

Computers

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not only beneficial but

also

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harmful for

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children

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children's

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health. Because between 6 and 12

children

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should be in healthy zone games could influence their psychology. Generally, there are several reasons why I believe that

junior

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should

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focus on reading stories from a paper. Their ideas hugged day by day,

for instance

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whenever there are read

books

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their mind works fastest

due to

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that degrees

children

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can easily learn languages or new skills and

then

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books

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sharpes

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sharpen

their mental focus at the same time.

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, with

the

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apply

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books

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our offspring can manipulate the brain. I agree

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these topic

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

186 words

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Imagination
Visualization
Complex vocabulary
Sentence structure
Focus
Concentration
Passive activity
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Gratification
Diverse perspectives
Cultural perspective
Historical perspective
Attention span
Educational enrichment
Cognitive development

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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or Playing Computer games for children. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Your friend is coming to your country from abroad, but you can't go to pick him up at the airport. Write a letter to him/her and say -why you can't pick him up -suggest alternative ideas -talk about what he can do in your country

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone app is becoming increasingly common. Does these development have more advantages or disadvantages?