Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or Playing Computer games for children. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In these present days, some kind of people think that reading stories from

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books

a book

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books

are

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better than watching TV and Playing PC games for

infent

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entertainment

. Personally, I support the idea that

children

should read

books

more than watching programs. In fact, more than half

percentage

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of the world

into

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about

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apply

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PC or modern

smart phones

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smartphones

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instead

books

According to games

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Games

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as well as

programs has many benefits for

children

for instance

they

are

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can learn more about tools

which need

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that are needed

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their life.

Computers

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not only beneficial but

also

harmful for

children

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children's

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health. Because between 6 and 12

children

should be in healthy zone games could influence their psychology. Generally, there are several reasons why I believe that

junior

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should

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focus on reading stories from a paper. Their ideas hugged day by day,

for instance

whenever there are read

books

their mind works fastest

due to

that degrees

children

can easily learn languages or new skills and

then

books

sharpes

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sharpen

their mental focus at the same time.

To sum up

, with

the

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books

our offspring can manipulate the brain. I agree

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with

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these topic

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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

186 words

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Imagination
Visualization
Complex vocabulary
Sentence structure
Focus
Concentration
Passive activity
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Gratification
Diverse perspectives
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Educational enrichment
Cognitive development

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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or Playing Computer games for children. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people think I school graduate should travel or work for a period of time. Instead of going directly to the study at university discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self- employed?

Many people in the world are learning English for personal development. How does learning English in an English-speaking country differ from learning it in a non-English-speaking country? Why?