The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
The line graph depicts the number of
shops
that closed and the number of new facilities that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the closed shops
were the most popular before the shops
which opened
replaced it in 2012. Moreover
, the shops
which opened obtained high quantities, while
the closed shops
lowest.
To begin
with, a shop which is opened had over 8,000 before falling significantly to 4,000 in 2012.
However
, it fluctuated gradually until 2015 and came back to the past position. Furthermore
, it maintained the same level during the next 2 years , before dropping steadily to 3,000 in the final years.
With regards to shops
which closed, it fluctuated progressively from 6,000 to over 6,000 in 2014 before decreasing significantly to under 1,000 in 2015. However
, it showed a significant increase to
5,000 in 2016 and maintained the same level in the final years. Therefore
, the shops
which were closed had the largest quantities over the period in question.Submitted by dimash171206 on
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