Fewer and fewer young people are doing sports nowadays.Whiy is this?Is this positive or negative development?

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indoor activities much more than outdoors. They are fully occupied running a making-money race to
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attempting
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can face hazardous health problems
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pressure.
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being done exercises regularly to grow individuals’ adroitness , can take a step to make young people
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their lifestyles.
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to lose themselves around difficulties.
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outdoor activities among young people
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that they feel
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or a lack of willingness to achieve a goal to do
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, they confirm some health or mental issues to damage them.
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