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E-books and e-readers are extremely popular and considered by many to be better than the traditional paper book. Others claim that paper is the better option. Discuss both these points and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 prefer
E-
books
 and
e-readers
 because they are smaller and much easier to carry around.
However
, those who prefer traditional
books
 like them more for their cheaper price and the clarity of reading they offer. Reading a book digitally could be better for you for many reasons,
such
 as the ability to carry it easily wherever you want and to read all your favourite
books
 from one place.
For example
, if you want to read a book but you did not bring it with you, you can just read it from your phone, e-reader, or E-book.
However
, some
people
 do not prefer to deal with technology, and they are mostly old
people
. We will discuss why they prefer traditional
books
 in the next paragraph. Old
people
 tend to read traditional
books
 because they find them better for them since they do not have a screen that could harm their eyes, and they are more familiar with traditional
books
 than
e-readers
 or
E-
books
.
Additionally
, old
people
 prefer to stay at home, chilling and relaxing, so they are probably not interested in the ability to carry around
books
 that
e-readers
 or
E-
books
 offer.
Above all
 that, touching the pages of a book is, alone, more than enough for them to choose traditional
books
 over e-reading or
E-
books
. In my opinion,
e-readers
 or
E-
books
 are better since I am someone who likes to not carry my
books
 around with me and I like to read everything from one place.
However
, if you want to read in the traditional way, there is nothing wrong with that. You can choose whatever you feel more comfortable with.
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The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which makes it easy to follow.
complete response
You provided specific reasons why some people might prefer e-books and others might prefer traditional books.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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