Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, protecting

culture

is one of the most important issues

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facing us, the majority of

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claimed

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that

culture

will be ruined if there used to earn

tourism

income

while

others

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that

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only

tourism

is the way of

conservation

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culture

. In my opinion, I lean toward the

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idea. Discussed below are several supporting my perspective. First and foremost, it

is widely acknowledge

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that people decide that

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in

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another

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another country

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countries

to enjoy the atmosphere and

culture

there.

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means that they try

harmonying

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harmonizing

harmony

harmonising

the novel

culture

that not have in their

countries

.

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, many

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Vietnamese

travel to Japan, Korea,

China

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and China

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to wear

the

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traditional

cloths

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,

this

lead

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to

the

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big fame

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all over the world to know about their characteristic things. Another point worth

consideration

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is lots of

tourisms

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tourists

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can have a big income for

that

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those

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countries

.

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statement

also

means that the

qualities

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of inhabitants

also

be improved because of the money that

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bring to them as a prime example that the authorities could use

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money to build more modern things. On the

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hand, there are several arguments in

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of the idea that

culture

could be destroyed by

tourism

. It is

also

convincing to realise that

tourism

can satiric their own

natural

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nature

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by making it more special. A special example of

this

is that

tourisms

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make the traditional cloths into another shape.

Moreover

, maybe

tourism

bring

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their own

culture

of their

countries

to travel and

then

make citizen get used to joining that,

then

they would forget what is the

culture

of their

countries

. Taking everything into conclusion, both sides have their own advantages but in my

opinion

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I put more

hightlight

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highlight

on the idea that there should be more

tourisms

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tourism

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to keep and protect

culture

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the culture

a culture

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of every

countries

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country

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.