The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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These two maps illustrate the changes in road access that arrived at a city hospital approximately three years apart.
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, in 2007 there was no rotary
while
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in 2010 there were two rotary.
According to
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what is shown, in 2007 there was a bus stop in the northeast of the area,
while
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in 2010 there was a roundabout in
south-east
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the south-east
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of the area. In 2007 there was a place of
the
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car park for both staff and the public
in contrast
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in 2010 there were separate places of
the
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car
park
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parks
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,
one
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for staff and the other
one
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for the public . In 2010 there was a bus station in the southwest of the area which was not found in 2007.In 2007 there was only
one
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exit to reach the car park
however
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in 2010 there were two exits
one
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in the northeast was for the public and the other
one
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was for staff in the southeast. To summarize, the only thing that had not completely changed was ring road.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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