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It is sometimes said that modern technology brings people more free time. However, some people say that instead technology is making people even busier. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#technology #people #time
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 the issue of modern
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 has become a matter of considerable debate. A group of
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 argue that it lets
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 enjoy leisure
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 more.
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, there are those who opine that
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 technological advancement is making
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 busier. In
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 I will examine both of these views and advocate my opinion
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. On the one hand,
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 who believe that the latest
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 allows
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 more spare
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 might say that, innovative
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 as artificial intelligence (AI), robotics, and augmented reality have reduced both effort and
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 of general
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, nowadays, with the help of home appliances like washing machines and vacuum cleaners
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 can wash their clothes and the surface of the house with almost no effort and in a very short amount of
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, technological devices are more accurate and faster than that of manual
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, allowing
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 to complete work earlier.
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 opponents of these notions argue that as
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 evolves,
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 are trying to be more productive by utilizing advanced technologies. What is more,
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 are now more punctual than ever before with the help of
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, with a smartwatch
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 are now well-informed about their schedule and can set a to-do list easily.
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 ultimately increases the eagerness of
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 to achieve more success in life. In conclusion, I would argue that
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 recent advancements in
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 have made our life a lot easier, allowing us to enjoy more free
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 with our friends and family. Those technological marvels are not only faster but
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 smarter in many ways.
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