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People these days watch TV, films, and other programs alone rather than with other people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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As
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 continues to develop, life in
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 era becomes more convenient as
people
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 now rather spend their
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 on streaming services, and computers alone than spending
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 with their friends and family. From my perspective, despite the comfortable life that
technology
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 gives us, it still has a negative development on our lives. First of all, we cannot deny that thanks to
technology
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 we can have a comfortable life as today. With the development of computers, streaming services, and other programs were launched, and
people
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 now can have access to many things like movies and films to entertain themselves without the need to consult with others. Take Netflix and Amazon Prime as an example, these film streaming services remove geographical barriers and provide many features, that give the viewer a better, flexible experience to enjoy the movie by themselves.
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, as society becomes too attached to their devices,
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 start to isolate themselves from other
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 and rather spend their
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 alone, looking at their phones, computers, etc.
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 change has weakened social ties among family members, friends, significant others, and society as a whole.
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, in the past, a family usually gathered around and had their meal together or watched TV and told jokes about it, but now, with the invention of
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,
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 have started to spend their
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 more separately from others. Even when it comes to shopping,
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 just sit at home and look at their devices to order kinds of stuff.
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 is becoming less likely, as many
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 spend a disproportionate amount of
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 alone, limiting their exposure to different perspectives of view. In conclusion, the advantages that
technology
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 brings to us are undeniable, but the disadvantages still outweigh the benefits as it affects our lifestyle and communication.
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