The chart below gives information about the adults with education at high school level in six countries in 2010.

The chart below gives information about the adults with education at high school level in six countries in 2010.
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The bar chart depicts the proportion of upper secondary education levels between two
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groups in six nations, namely: Germany, USA, Russia, South Korea, Brazil and China in 2010.
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it is clear that
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the percentage of high
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graduates in the 25-34
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group was higher than the 55-
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figure in almost every country, except for the US.
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, South Korea had the largest ratio of the young group’s high
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graduates,
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the opposite is true for the US. To be more specific, in South Korea, approximately 98% of people aged
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25 to 34 finished high
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, compared to 91% in Russia.
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, the proportion of those at the
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55-64 completing upper-secondary
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in both of these nations is much lower, only at 42% and 70%, respectively.
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, there was a huge difference in Brazil, with 52% in the young
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group and it nearly doubled the figure for its counterpart. Apropos the others, China had the lowest percentage of people with high
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diplomas with only 20% in the 25-34s and 10% more than the 55-64s. In Germany and the USA, there was a small variation between the figures for the two
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groups.
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, in Germany, the proportion of the senior group was higher than that of the juniors, at 88% and 82%, respectively. Meanwhile, in the US, they were 88% for the young and 90% for the old.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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