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It is becoming increasingly popular to get an year off after high school and before Enrolling into college. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

#year #school #college
It is becoming a controversial issue that
students
 get a
year
 off before joining college. Mostly
students
 take
an
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year
 off to travel or to acquire any skill. some
also
 work as volunteers in different companies.
however
,
this
gap
year
also
effects
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affects
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 many of the
students
. Some
students
 are well-determined
with
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about
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their future and they learn a good skill in which
there
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their
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 interest starts developing.
Furthermore
, the student
choose
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chooses
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 the subjects related to
that
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the
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 skill he learned in
gap
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the gap
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year
. Some
students
also
 work as
and
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an
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 assistant or volunteer. In order to create a bright future, working as an intern or assistant is essential for understanding the market's realities and requirements for effective service. Many of them can get distracted and maybe they can get a hobby in which
there
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 time can get wasted. Some
students
also
 get
in
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involved in
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 illegal activities because they are free all the time and
then
 they can not return to
studies
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their studies
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. So my suggestion is
students
 should not take a
gap
year
. In conclusion, taking a
gap
year
 mostly
effects
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affects
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 the
students
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student's
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 studies. But if the student is motivated for his future, in that
case
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 it can work.
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