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Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is an irrefutable fact that in recent decades, the preservation of endangered animal species has been a controversial topic. It is popularly believed that saving endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable materials. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement. It could be because wildlife is an essential part of our life. In
this
 following essay, I am going to explain my ideas with some specific reasons
To begin
 with, wild
animals
 are a beneficial part of our society.
Furthermore
, their extinction brings big problems to the ecosystem. On top of that, there are every creature on earth plays a significant role.
Hence
 humans are trying to save
animals
due to
 the fact that endangering is increasing day by day.
Therefore
, it may affect the coming generation. I think
this
 phenomenon does not waste valuable resources on the one hand.
For instance
,
animals
 which are polar bears, deer, wolves and panda, these
animals
 playing a big role in nature.
On the other hand
, in recent years society has taken up a lot of wildlife spaces.
Thus
, to live these
animals
 need forests.
According to
this
 condition,people create new forests.
Therefore
, we keep endangering
animals
 and green areas perfectly providing that trying harder without wasting valuable resources. I mean it does not depend on valuable resources. To summarise the above-mentioned points, efforts put in order to save the endangered species do not depend on the waste of useful materials. It depends on people's hands.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • extinction
  • preserve
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • ecological roles
  • conservation efforts
  • scientific discoveries
  • advancements
  • cultural value
  • aesthetic value
  • employment opportunities
  • local economies
  • ethical responsibility
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