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The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now

The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now
#changes #park
The map depicts how
park
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the park
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altered
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was altered
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 in 1980 and now.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
a
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the
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park
 has been transformed from
old
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an old
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 to
modern
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a modern
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 and splendid area.
Furthermore
, a
park
became
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has become
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 more convenient than in the past.
To begin
 with gates, they have been made more gates which
is
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are
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 located on the north, east and south of the
park
. Another interesting change is that
bench
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the bench
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 which is situated on the west side has been enlarged and
bush
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a bush
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 has been constructed
instead
 of flowers.
Consequently
, the area has been expanded.
Therefore
,
flowers
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the flowers
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 which
is
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are
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 placed on the east side of the map
has
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have
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 been replaced by
play
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a
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 ground which contains a lot of facilities for children. Another striking development is that
place
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the place
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 where trees were situated has been expanded and
built
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apply
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more facilities ,
such
 as chairs, desks and barbecues which play a vital role in
park
 development.
However
, the
park
 has been altered very fastly and in the future will be changed.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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