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Look at the graph about the number of university applications. Write sentences with the words in brackets. Write about main trends or important points.

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The line chart provides key information about the
number
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 of
students
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 applying to four different universities: Atherton
University
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, The
University
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 of Lakewood, Alstead
University
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, and Lindslade College, between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that most
students
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 apply to Atherton
University
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.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of applications kept rising continuously until the end of the
period
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. Followed by Alstead
University
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, which experienced a sharp
increase
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 at the beginning and again in the middle of the
period
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. Linslade College trend showed ups and downs in the
number
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 of applicants. Meanwhile, The
University
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 of Lakewood declined sharply throughout the same timeframe.
According to
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 what is shown, Atherton
University
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 had the largest
number
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 of applicants, the
university
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 saw a steady
increase
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 from 1980 to 1995, but
then
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 rose significantly until 2004, reaching approximately 6300
students
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. After that, the
number
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 of applications dropped slightly to around 6100 in 2010. Alsted
University
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 saw a noticeable
increase
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 in the first part of the
period
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, rising from 2200 to 4000 submissions,
then
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 the
number
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 of applicants stabilised for almost 10 years. After 1995, a sharp
increase
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 occurred in the
number
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 of applications until 2000,
then
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 dropped by the end of the
period
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, reaching 4100
students
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.
On the other hand
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, Lindslade Collage, had a fluctuating trend, with numbers going up and down every five years. From 2005 to 2010, the trend rise notably, reaching roughly 3000
students
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. Submissions at The
University
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 of Lakewood kept decreasing from the start of the timeframe until the end, Falling to 2500.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a brief conclusion summarizing the main trends you've discussed, which can help reinforce your message and provide closure to your essay.
task achievement
Although the numerical data is mostly accurate, ensure the terminology used (e.g., 'Linslade College' instead of 'Lindslade College') is correct and consistent throughout the essay to enhance professionalism and clarity.
task achievement
You provided a clear overview of the trends in university applications over time, making some important points about individual universities.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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