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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of
students
 choose a foreign university for higher certification.
This
 issue brings a special concern regarding the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad. In
this
 essay, I am going to mention some of the benefits and drawbacks. There are clearly several advantages to studying abroad. first of all,
students
 will travel internationally and meet lots of people with different backgrounds and cultures, so, they have more opportunities to develop their insight about the world and learn different skills to adapt themselves to various conditions.
Moreover
, if they are accepted to a high-rank university, after graduation, they will have more chances to be employed in a better organisation with a better salary compared to other competitors who lack
this
 quality.
Thirdly
, studying abroad can increase their self-confidence
due to
 learning several skills which are critical for the rest of their lives.
on the other hand
, not all of the
students
 can benefit from studying in a foreign country. In other words, there are some obvious disadvantages too.
For example
, feeling homesick which some opposing views believe is the most significant drawback.
In addition
, studying abroad is expensive and not all families and
students
 are able to afford the tuition fees. Meanwhile,
students
 have to deal with language barriers and cultural differences at the same time.
Therefore
,
this
 is not the best option for everyone , especially for those who did not consider these challenges.
To conclude
, based on what is discussed above, there are several arguments for and against studying abroad. In my opinion, enough information should be given to
students
 before making
this
 decision.
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Task Achievement
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Achievement
The essay presents a balanced view of both the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, demonstrating a complete understanding of the task.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've succeeded in structuring your essay logically, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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