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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The presented maps delineate the scheme of the social
gardens
 in 1920 and throughout 10 decades. It can be clearly seen that Grand Park has experienced great transformation
due to
 the fact that everything is being altered and replaced with demanded locations. It could be plainly viewed that from the 1920s layout, a fountain was located in the middle of the Grand Park, On the left side there was placed stage for musicians.
Furthermore
, the Pond for water plants was on the northeastern corner of the playground. , there are just two main entrances at Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street which are being
ofdisposed
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disposed
of disposed
 higher and lower than the fountain ,
In addition
, there were rose
gardens
 and seats along a fence,
,
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Consequently
 5 seats and 3 rose
gardens
 are situated in the grand park.
Additionally
 on the right side of Eldon Street’s entrance there had been a rectangle-shaped glasshouse. As it is presented in the nowadays plan 3 rose
gardens
 are being united in an enormous one and placed
instead
 of a fountain, there are 4 seats around it.
Furthermore
 in places of the stage for musicians and ,pond there are Amphitheatre for concerts and
children
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 playing area, On top of that there is a roundly shaped rose garden above.
In Addition
 on the left side of the playing area, a Café is located, Below the cafe there is parking with water features.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Amphitheater
  • Landscaping
  • Recreational facilities
  • Grassy areas
  • Flowerbeds
  • Pathways
  • Seating areas
  • Modern amenities
  • Children’s play area
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Social impact
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