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The computer is widely used in education and some people think that teachers will not play important roles in the classroom. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays the great majority of people support the idea that teachers' role in education is really crucial,
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 others believe that their job may disappear
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computers
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 impact.
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 the
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 can be right in some cases, I support the idea that the profession of teacher is eternal, and artificial intelligence can not replace it. On the one hand, it is obvious that
computers
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 become an essential tool for everyone today. Students use
Internet
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 in order to find new information during lessons, to keep in touch with each other and to improve their knowledge as well.
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, with the help of
ChatGpt
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 it is easier to complete various tasks and reduce the time for studying and unnecessary things.
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, there is no doubt that
computers
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 can not take the teacher's place. AI
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 to give learners only the data rather than to find an individual approach to each of them. In a nutshell, it is impossible for electronic machines to understand what people feel or want.
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, the best school in Kazakhstan "Nis" is focused not only on educational curriculum
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 but
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 on relationships between their tutors and students.
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, only a real educator can give you advice on how to overcome problems
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 studying, support your endeavors or just speak with you. Taking everything into consideration, I would say that
computers
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is
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 an additional tool in universities or
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schools
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, they can not be considered as real educators. No one can substitute for a teacher.
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