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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps indicate the difference between a small
island
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 that has been developed for tourism. It can be seen that the
island
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 has changed rapidly with the construction of some tourist facilities. The
island
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 has a lot of places for
accomodation
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accommodation
 and
beach
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the beach
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 has been exploited for swimming. Looking at the maps in more detail, a large number of small huts have been built for visitors who could stay on the
island
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. The reception building has been built in the middle of the
island
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, and the restaurant is on the north side of the
island
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.
As well as
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 the layouts mentioned above, the new facilities on the
island
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 include a pier where boats and ships can dock. There was a vehicle track linking the pier, the reception, and the restaurant.
And the
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The
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 huts were connected by footpaths.
Finally
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, the beach was designed so tourists could swim and walk on the west side of the
island
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • before and after
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • natural features
  • network of cottages
  • footpaths
  • recreational areas
  • pristine environment
  • organized lodging facilities
  • strategically positioned
  • delineated pathways
  • untouched nature
  • accessibility
  • isolated island experience
  • enhanced transportation options
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