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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The analysis shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in a city over a six-month period in 2011. The data is categorized into three inquiry methods: in person, by letter/email, and by
telephone
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.
Overall
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, there was a consistent upward trend in the number of enquiries received by letter/email and in person. A contrasting trend was observed for the number of enquiries received by
telephone
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 which gradually decreased over the same period. For the in-person
inquiries
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, there was a steady increase from
January
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 to
June
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, with the most significant spike occurring between March to April from 800 to around 1200
inquiries
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. As for the
inquiries
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 received by
telephone
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, it showed a similar upward trend.
However
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, the increase was not as gradual as an in-person method. There were two plateaus, one from
January
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 to February and another from May to
June
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.
Lastly
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, for the method by
telephone
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, it experienced a gradual decline throughout the period, starting from 800 in
January
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 and reaching its lowest point in
June
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, just below 400. In conclusion, the Tourist Information Office experienced a steady increase in
inquiries
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 submitted in person and by
telephone
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 from
January
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 to
June
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 2011.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words telephone, inquiries, january, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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