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your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he or she is doing about celebrating Nes Year in different countries. write a letter to your friend. in your letter write a letter to your friend.in your letter : 1 say how important new year is to people in your country . 2describe now new year is celebrated in your country . 3 explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your countey.

#friend #college #project #nes #year #countries #people #country #celebrations #countey
Dear Anna , How are you? It’s
have
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been so long
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meet
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 you.
Last
 year it
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on
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Susan
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weddings
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. As just three months are left in
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 new year , I want you should join us
this
 time it would be a a lot of fun. If I talk about why it is important
,
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 because that event is related to the history of my country and is one of the
way
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 to feel their presence around us. Moving ahead for
this
 day
first
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 we start by doing some decoration at home just a
big
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 before the new year and
also
 do some cleaning and
31st
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the 31st
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 of December around 12 AM. We are using crackers eating sweets and
congratulate
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 each other. . On the next day, we are going to gurdwara and pray for
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developing
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 of a family. The part I like about
this
,
this
 is the day that keeps the families together and
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 their bonding even
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stronger . So tell me, when are you coming eagerly waiting for you take care and give my best to everyone . Best regards Mamta
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coherence cohesion
Organize your letter with clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a different aspect of New Year celebrations in your country.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and closing for an informal letter.
task achievement
Expand on the importance of New Year celebrations in your country. Include specific cultural or historical references.
task achievement
Provide more details about how New Year is celebrated in your country. Include specific traditions or customs.
grammatical range and accuracy
Improve the clarity and coherence of your ideas. Avoid run-on sentences and provide clear explanations.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significance
  • joyous
  • new beginnings
  • traditions
  • customs
  • gather
  • fireworks displays
  • resolutions
  • festive atmosphere
  • sense of hope
  • special dishes
  • exchange of gifts
  • countdown
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