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The graph shows the use of landlines and mobile phones in 6 different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the use of landlines and mobile phones in 6 different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the usage of landlines and mobile phones in
America
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, China, Russia, Japan, Sweden and Turkey per 100 people.
Overall
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, it is clearly depicted that
land
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landphone
phone
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users
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 are more popular in
America
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 and China, compared to the other four countries which prefer to use cell phones rather than landlines. As for the details, almost 90 people out of 100, use cell phones in Japan and Turkey.
By contrast
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, the Japanese carry the least amount of land
phone
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users
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 out of the 6 countries.
On the other hand
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, the rate of land
phone
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users
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 in
America
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, Russia and Sweden are more or less the same, at around 60 out of 100 people.
Furthermore
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, the rate of landline
users
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 in both China and Turkey
are
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 levelled off at 68, which is the highest number of consumers for landlines.
On the contrary
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, in
America
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, landline customers are doubled compared to cell
phone
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users
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, 30 and 60 respectively. All in all, the amount of mobile
phone
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users
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are
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is
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 much higher than landline
users
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among
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in
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 most of the mentioned countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, phone, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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